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I dont know why my teacher didnt give me any advice about this essay and he only told me to go to the tutoring for further assistances..He gave me an C with no reason ..He just said that he was confused...You can download it from http://thugian123.com/essay01.doc %26gt;%26gt;%26gt;Thanks a lot of ...

I have 1 essay ..http://thugian123.com/essay01.... I got 10 out of 15 .Help me to estimate wat wrong wit it?
Inside, every person keeps their best experience and most memorable time of their life. My memory is not as good as that of a genius or a smart person but I still remember the time before taking an exam in 9th grade. It is such a beautiful and priceless memory in my life.





Teachers are the ones who are most worried about the future of their students, because students achievements are a reflection of their achievement as a teacher. The teachers had to prepare the practical examination sheet for student. They wanted to make sure that everyone understood the problem and gave the students random quizzes. That was a hard time, because the students had to take notes and study by themselves, otherwise, they would not be able to catch up the lesson and the guide from our teacher. Mostly our teacher would mark the student’s questions and ask them to do their homework after class or give feedback to wrong answers. Moreover, if they had the serious problem such as not listening to the teacher or playing around during class our teacher might ask them stay longer in the classroom for the extra workshop. For example, when we finished the class at 5 pm instead of going home they had to stay in the teachers’ office until 7 pm for studying and preparing the homework for tomorrow. That was the best way to help them because our teacher stayed there to assist them. For some reason, the school environment really got them focused on the lesson. Their parents agreed with our teacher that this was an excellent learning method. Beside that, our teacher had to check the homework on the black board or call each individual to correct another persons’ worksheet. More important was the announcement of the deadline to submit the project. Every single day we had to check the attendance and learn the theory carefully. At the weekend, students would have the group study at their home or their friends‘s home to prepare the assignment. This was the best way to improve you for the rest of the time after school. In the group study‘s time, we could discuss the problems that we did not know the solution to and learn tactics to make it more clear. If we encountered any problems in the exercise, we could call our teacher or go directly to their house for further assistance. Furthermore, our teachers usually had a meeting to estimate each class’s performance and give advice to improve it. They often argued about the choice of who was the best student to give them an award, because our teacher had a different opinion on this than the others. However, the methods that they applied to each student were really effective and professional. That explained why my class passed 100 % of the final examination. After that, we had a small celebration at a restaurant with traditional food, such as fish soup cooked with peppermint, which is really good for the digestive system and we received congratulations from them. When we were out at the restaurant everyone looked completely different to how they looked at school, I felt that they were more like my best friends instead of teachers. In summary, our teachers are the best guides and instructors to show us how to reach the highest success as a student and in life.





Students do not have time to think of entertainment because this is the most important time of our lives to achieve good marks and success in school in order to apply to schools such as Harvard, which has a very high quality of education. In order to make this dream a reality it is important to work hard and get good grades. Not only were the students studying at home and in groups with their friends, they also went to the learning center to revise their assignments and homework. When students were feeling sick or if they were being lazy they did not catch up to the others in the theory and exercises The students were not only studying at home or group study with their friends but also going to the learning center which was paid to revise their assignments and homework. For some reasons like lazy and sickness, they didn’t catch up the theory and exercises with other people. So they





ok i revised a bit of your essay, i would like to know which school you go to because if you are paying money for it you shouldn't, you are obviously an esl student and you have no grasp of the english language, your verb agreements are all over the place, you are using words in the wrong way, its a total mess the teacher should not have given you 1 out of 15 and the fact that he wouldn't even tell you what was wrong with it, you have a horrible uncaring teacher, good luck and get extra tutoring, speak as much english as you can to native english speakers, ask them what words mean and how to say them properly, study verbs and tenses
Reply:Are you doing English as a second language? There are really a lot of grammatical errors in your essay - and the sentences are very confusing. That's probably why he marked you down. If you have tutoring available, take it. Your tutor can go over the paper with you and help you to find your mistakes and learn how to correct them.


I applaud you for wanting to learn more about why your paper was marked down - most kids would just sulk and ignore the whole thing. You've got a very positive outlook and if you hang on to that, you're going to do much better in future.


Tell your tutor that you really need to work on your pronouns antecedents and referents, as well as agreement.
Reply:Is this essay part of your studies in English as a foreign language? If so, your teacher was right to suggest that you need tutoring. Your writing is almost incomprehensible.

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